Okay. I posted a story for the little writing contest on the archive (I think I'm the first to do so, but don't quote me on that.) Now I would like to start a thread to see what everyone thinks. I know it's a little brief, and it jumps a little, but I've always had trouble writing anything of length because I just run out of energy or interest. I hope you guys like it, but that's not up to me. Feel free to critique my work. Don't be afraid to tell me what you think. I want your honest opinions. It is often through criticizm, both good and bad, that we are able to improve ourselves.
Okay, enuff said. here's the link to the story:
http://robin.thornvalley.com/node/400
Let me know what you think.